Planning to read a poem for our movie as a voice over

Originally we were going to read A Kill by Ted Hughes.
Flogged lame with legs
Shot through the head with balled brains
Shot blind with eyes
Nailed down by his own ribs
Strangled just short of his last gasp
By his own windpipe
Clubbed unconscious by his own heart

Seeing his life stab through him, a dream flash
As he drowned in his own blood
Dragged under by the weight of his own guts. 

But when we tried it, it didn't really connect with our movie so we decided to change it around and this is what we came up with:
Alone in a graveyard
Waiting for someone long gone
Unaware that I am here
Watching
Soon to be
Clubbed unconscious by her own heart
Strangled just short of her last gasp
Seeing her life drain through her, a dream flash.   

In the end we didn't use a voice over for our movie because we thought it didn't really connect with the storyline of our movie so we decided to scrap it.